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Drabble #2 for Ithilien

Title: Doubt
Prompt: Basketball
Word count: 300
Rating: G (sometimes i surprise even myself)



He loped down the half court, the ball a steady beat beneath his hand. He didn't want to think, didn't want to know, just wanted to yell and scream and be anything other than what he was. His palm ached with the monotony of his movements, reminded him of calluses finally gone. His legs screamed. Heat seared through him and told him he should be grateful, not a whiny little bitch. He jumped up for a basket, growled as the pain reverberated from his heels to his hips.

His breath threatened to explode his lungs. Sweat burned his eyes, dried his lips. He couldn't stop. Down the court, back again. Down and back. Shoot. He missed. Again. Missed. His knees wobbled on the last jump shot. He knew he should stop, knew people would be disappointed, knew he'd hear lectures if anyone even noticed. Fuck it. He landed the next two.

The one person he wanted, needed, wasn't here. He'd fucked off to Europe for a class. What professor was retarded enough to take a class away now. Salt froze on his skin as he panicked. What if that wasn't true? The ball fell from his hands, bounced until it was rolling and eventually stilled on the floor. What professor was that dumb? A trip like this - even with a valid reason - was going to screw up any student's grades big time.

He fumbled over to his gym bag, rummaged around until he found his cell. Was it too late to call? Hell. He frowned. A text message? When had he received it? How had he missed it?

Miss U. Love U. 2 days = 2 long. Love U til I M stupid. Plz call.

Luke breathed for the first time in days. Noah would be home soon.

Comments

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miss_smp
Oct. 25th, 2008 02:50 am (UTC)
G....WOW!!! hee hee hee

I love that you are so versatile!!! **wub**....NOW WHERE'S MY SMUT!!! :P


nouveau_monday
Oct. 25th, 2008 03:13 am (UTC)
smut? smut? what is this smut of which you speak?


my smut. she is broken curremtly. but this was fun to write.
miss_smp
Oct. 25th, 2008 03:51 am (UTC)
but, but...BROKEN? Noooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!! **cries :P**

well I guess I'll just have to be patient til the smut gets fixed and until then I'll be loving any drabbles you grace us with!!!

I *heart* monday
sweetiejelly
Oct. 25th, 2008 02:57 am (UTC)
Love it, Monday. Basketball to work off some of the tension makes perfect sense to me. And actually, if he were to have ran into Kevin there, that would have made sense as well...

I love that you're drabbling :D That note was so adorable and the reaction too.
nouveau_monday
Oct. 25th, 2008 03:14 am (UTC)
If he had run into kevin, he totally would have chucked the ball at his head and freaked out. this luke was way too much of a diva for my own patience.
sweetiejelly
Oct. 25th, 2008 03:30 am (UTC)
He did seem to be in a mood here. I meant the show though... since they were going to bring Kevin on board. It might have been even messier if Luke ran into Kevin while Noah was abroad. It'd also given Van some chance to work more during that time, but I digress. :p

p.s. I sorta emailed the show about that arm licking/biting scene. But I sorta think it's all going to some poor intern somewhere hitting the delete button over and over. :p
nouveau_monday
Oct. 25th, 2008 03:33 am (UTC)
oh yes, if he had seen kevin there, it actually could have been really cool. which is why it didn't happen.

that's awesome about emailing the show. i wonder if we should all bombard them with non R rated scenes we think they should show?
sweetiejelly
Oct. 25th, 2008 03:38 am (UTC)
i wonder if we should all bombard them with non R rated scenes we think they should show?
That would be awesome! They'd either be pissed off or amused. I just emailed atwt at cbs dot com. Wonder if it'd be more effective to write the soap mags? Dunno. But I love that idea! There are so many scenes in this fandom that they could totally use. :)
nouveau_monday
Oct. 25th, 2008 01:05 pm (UTC)
I don't know if I'd care if they were pissed or amused. I just think it would be fun. Maybe we should organize this somewhere?
sweetiejelly
Oct. 25th, 2008 03:52 pm (UTC)
That's a good idea. Should it be at luke_noah comm? Write a scene of your choosing that could be on the show today that's more than kissing and less than half-naked/on or near a bed sexing/implied sexing? Something like that?
ithilien22
Oct. 25th, 2008 04:58 am (UTC)
Oh, this is gorgeous. I love you so much for confronting your fear of writing from Luke's perspective, especially when this is the kind of amazing gem that we get when you do! The imagery is so...tactile. I can't even think of the right word, but it's like I'm right there on the court with him, so close I can taste the sweat (and that nagging bite of doubt), you know? I just love it (and I wish I had better words to tell you so).

Sorry I haven't been around. Still feel awful times terrible but these drabbles are WAY better than chicken noodle soup!
kissmedirty
Oct. 25th, 2008 05:27 am (UTC)
"Love you till I'm stupid"

*sigh*

so much wonderfullness :D
shizumaslover
Oct. 25th, 2008 05:47 am (UTC)
Fuck in a G rated fic? LOLOLOL ILU MONDAY. 8D

Amazing, as always. I could really feel his frustration. And this --

Salt froze on his skin as he panicked.

-- was wonderful. Such lovely descriptions. <3
nouveau_monday
Oct. 25th, 2008 01:00 pm (UTC)
*giggles* i totally forgot about the fact that there was swearing. I guess I should change that, huh. Whoops!

glad you could feel the frustration. i'm not so good with description, so i'm trying to work on that.
indigo_5
Oct. 25th, 2008 05:51 am (UTC)
Wonderful! Love Luke's frustration, Luke's insecurities, Luke's crankiness. And this:

Miss U. Love U. 2 days = 2 long. Love U til I M stupid. Plz call.

is just too adorable for words. Loved it.
nouveau_monday
Oct. 25th, 2008 01:01 pm (UTC)
thanks. i want them to always be adorable.
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nouveau_monday
Oct. 25th, 2008 01:02 pm (UTC)
thanks!
ladysonsie
Oct. 25th, 2008 09:33 am (UTC)
You and the drabbling! I'm glad you are playing with it, hopefully it will help your writer's cramp. Which you wouldn't know having read this.

You packed a ton of emotion in 300 words babe. Like ithilien said - you are RIGHT THERE with cranky pants Luke on the court.

His palm ached with the monotony of his movements, reminded him of calluses finally gone. His legs screamed. Heat seared through him and told him he should be grateful, not a whiny little bitch.

I love this part because like the last one it has a past that floats thru it. That simple line about calluses finally gone was perfect. *kisses*
nouveau_monday
Oct. 25th, 2008 01:03 pm (UTC)
well, you know how you and i roll, it's gotta have continuity. always.

*smooches*
qafaddiction
Oct. 25th, 2008 03:33 pm (UTC)
I thought it was Noah until I got the part about Europe... oops! Probably sterotyping because he's "the tall one". ;) But I really liked it. Very visceral.
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